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The proportion of money spent on music in three different years in Northern Ireland

The proportion of money spent on music in three different years in Northern Ireland Mqy86

The three pie charts was illustrating the proportion of money spent on various sources of music in three different years in Northern Ireland. The music lovers preferred to hear music through CDs, concerts, digital downloads and other sources. This chart was explaining about the percentage of amount spent on these different modes in 2005, 2007 and 2011 respectively. First, CDs were the most sold almost 61% in 2005 while their counts started to decline to 41% in 2007 and furthermore, it went down to 26% in 2011. Concerts were holding the second highest range of amount spent of 31% in 2005 while this count reduced further to 23% in 2007. However the proportion was increased by 5%, making it 28% in 2011. As per the chart, the amount spent on digital downloads increased significantly from 6% to 25% and nearly doubled to 43% on the following years: 2005, 2007 and 2011 respectively. However, the fraction spent on other sources, remained more or less same over all three years ranging 2 to 3%. To conclude, these pie charts depicted the spike in amount spent for digital downloads while there was a decline in money spent on CDs over years.

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