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The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003 q5nLP
The given pie charts demonstrate the ratio of energy production from different resources containing hydropower, oil, nuclear power, coal, natural gas in a particular nation between 1983 and 2003. Overall, it is clear that the data of energy was created by oil slightly decreased, while the ratio of energy produced by nuclear power grew. The proportion of energy produced by oil was the largest. In all the two pie charts, the percentage of energy produced by oil and coal accounted for 42% and 23% respectively of the total in 1983. 20 years later, the rate of energy generated by oil slightly fell by about 4%, while energy from coal also decreased by 10%. By contrast, the figure for energy created by nuclear power and natural gas was increased about 4% and 10% respectively and surpassed the percentage of energy generated from coal. Besides that, hydropower was accounted for only 4% of the energy created in both years.
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pie charts demonstrate the ratio of
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energy
production from
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different
resources containing hydropower,
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oil
, nuclear power, coal, natural gas in a particular nation between 1983 and 2003.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the data of
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energy
was created
by
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oil
slightly
decreased, while the ratio of
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energy
produced by nuclear power grew. The proportion of
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energy
produced by
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oil
was the largest.

In all the two pie charts, the percentage of
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energy
produced by
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oil
and coal accounted for 42% and 23%
respectively
of the total in 1983. 20 years later, the rate of
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energy
generated by
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oil
slightly
fell by about 4%, while
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energy
from coal
also
decreased by 10%.

By contrast, the figure for
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energy
created by nuclear power and natural gas
was increased
about 4% and 10%
respectively
and surpassed the percentage of
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energy
generated from coal.
Besides
that, hydropower
was accounted
for
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only
4% of the
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energy
created in both years.
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IELTS academic The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003

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