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task 1-healthcare and life expectancy

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The bar chart and table are about two different subject which are healthcare resources and life expectancy in 8 countries on the chat and related 3 countries on the table. Regarding the bar chart, the number of hospital beds per thousand of population is the highest value in Japan (8). As a matter of fact, other countries (Australia, Canada, Netherlands, Spain, United Kingdom, United States) have very few beds compared to them which is all these countries around 4. In terms of the table, it shows two different issues which are health spending per person and average life expectancy in Japan, Netherland and US. It is inevitable that, the lowest expenditure ($2, 581) and also the highest average life (83) could be seen in Japan. On the other hand, when we look at the table, the number of beds in this country is significantly higher (14 for every thousand people) while US has the most spending ($6, 719), the lowest life expectancy (78) and number of beds. Overall, as we see, although government spend the least money to healthcare in Japan, citizens can expect to live a long time plus the most bed opportunities compared to other countries.
The bar chart and table are about two
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subject which are healthcare resources and
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life
expectancy in 8
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on the chat and related 3
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countries
on the table.

Regarding the bar chart, the number of hospital
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beds
per thousand of population is the highest value in
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Japan
(8). As a matter of fact, other
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countries
(Australia, Canada, Netherlands, Spain, United Kingdom, United States) have
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very
few
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beds
compared to them which is all these
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countries
around 4.

In terms of the table, it
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shows
two
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issues which are health spending per person and average
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life
expectancy in
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Japan
,
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Netherland
and US. It is inevitable that, the lowest expenditure ($2, 581) and
also
the highest average
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life
(83) could be
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in
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Japan
.
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, when we look at the table, the number of
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beds
in this
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country
is
significantly
higher (14 for every thousand
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people
) while US has the most spending ($6, 719), the lowest
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life
expectancy (78) and number of beds.

Overall
, as we
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, although
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government
spend the least money to healthcare in
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Japan
, citizens can
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expect
to
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live
a long time plus the most
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opportunities compared to other
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IELTS academic task 1-healthcare and life expectancy

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
198 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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