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The line graphs illustrate the data about percentage of households with electrical appliances and amount of hours consumed for housework in households in one country over the period of almost a century.

The line graphs illustrate the data about percentage of households with electrical appliances and amount of hours consumed for housework in households in one country over the period of almost a century. eRRqW
The line graphs illustrate the data about percentage of households with electrical appliances and amount of hours consumed for housework in households in one country over the period of almost a century. It is apparently seen from the first diagram that there has been a rapid growth in the explosion of refrigerator while washing machine was utilised progressively between 1920 and 2019. The usage of refrigerator improved gradually to 100% and on the second position with 70percent increase, vacuum cleaner can be stated. Among other electrical appliances washing machine has a steady rise from 40% to approximately 73% over the period. In 1920 country spent 50hours on house chores per week and the quantity of time started to fall from 1940 till 1960 to 20hours. After that time expenditure on housework had slight decline to 10 hours by 2019. Overall, ownership of electrical appliances climbed dramatically and the amount of time spent doing housework had constant fall.
The line graphs illustrate the data about percentage of households with electrical appliances and amount of
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consumed for housework in households in one country over the period of almost a century. It is
apparently
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from the
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diagram that there has been a rapid growth in the explosion of refrigerator while washing machine was
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utilised
progressively
between 1920 and 2019. The usage of refrigerator
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improved
gradually
to 100% and on the second position with 70percent increase, vacuum cleaner can
be stated
. Among other electrical appliances washing machine has a steady rise from 40% to approximately 73% over the period. In 1920 country spent
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50hours
on
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house
chores per week and the quantity of time
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started
to fall
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20hours
.
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After
that time expenditure on housework had slight decline to 10
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hours
by 2019.
Overall
, ownership of electrical appliances climbed
dramatically
and the amount of time spent doing housework had constant fall.

IELTS academic The line graphs illustrate the data about percentage of households with electrical appliances and amount of hours consumed for housework in households in one country over the period of almost a century.

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