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The line graph renders the changes of water use of 3 distinct categories measured in km3 around the world in a 100 year period from 1900 to 2000 and the table displayed the consumption of water in 2000 in Brazil and Congo respectively.

The line graph renders the changes of water use of 3 distinct categories measured in km3 around the world in a 100 year period from 1900 to 2000 and the table displayed the consumption of water in 2000 in Brazil and Congo respectively. Ajr6M
The line graph renders the changes of water use of 3 distinct categories measured in km3 around the world in a 100 year period from 1900 to 2000 and the table displayed the consumption of water in 2000 in Brazil and Congo respectively. Looking first at the line graph above, in general, the consumption of water worldwide increased in “agriculture”, “industrial use” and “domestic use”. A drastic incline can be seen in “agriculture” from 500 km3 in 1900 to just above 3000 km3 in 2000, while a moderate growth from nearly 0 km3 to 1200 km3 and a minor rise from 0 km3 to approx. . .
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period from 1900 to 2000 and the table displayed the consumption of water in 2000 in Brazil and Congo
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Looking
first
at the line graph above,
in general
, the consumption of water worldwide increased in “agriculture”, “industrial
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” and “domestic
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A drastic incline can be
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in “agriculture” from 500 km3 in 1900 to
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above 3000 km3 in 2000, while a moderate growth from
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IELTS academic The line graph renders the changes of water use of 3 distinct categories measured in km3 around the world in a 100 year period from 1900 to 2000 and the table displayed the consumption of water in 2000 in Brazil and Congo respectively.

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