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The given graph shows information Bout the challenges people face when they move to another country.

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The given graph depicts data about the challenges individuals face when they move to live in another nation. Overall, learning the local language is the highest difficult task among over 55, whereas finding somewhere to live is the lowest arduous in this community. Making friends is the problem faced by 46% of individuals in the age group- 18-34, while this number decreases to 23% in over 55 age group. The age group of 35- 54 is faced this problem to 36%. age group 18-34, finding somewhere to live is stood at 40%. A gradual increase in this number is seen in 35-54. Then this number again decreases to 23% in over 55. In over 55, 54% of individuals face the dilemma in learning language, although solely 29% of sectors face this problem when they move to another nation. 35% of adults face difficulty in learning the language.
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group- 18-34, while this number decreases to 23% in
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group 18-34, finding somewhere to
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difficulty in learning the language.

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