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The diagrams compare information on the distribution of the residents of the USA for 6 various New Year resolutions over 2 year period of 2012 and 2014.

The diagrams compare information on the distribution of the residents of the USA for 6 various New Year resolutions over 2 year period of 2012 and 2014. NMdr0
The diagrams compare information on the distribution of the residents of the USA for 6 various New Year resolutions over 2 year period of 2012 and 2014. Overall, mostly each sector experienced a slight downfall in the following year. And, 'Improve personal fitness' led the race in each of these years. "Improve personal fitness" was the most popular resolution in 2012 and 2014 with 32% and 29% respectively out of the total population. It was observed that number of people for 'Quit bad habits' that started with 8% increased drastically by close to three times in 2014. Hence, making it the second most opted choice for the latter. Similarly, the 'Others' segment noticed the same trend of upward growth from 6% to 11%. However, the 'Travel' and 'Spend more time with family' had drop-in ratio by 6% and 2% sequentially, where 18% and 11% were recorded for 2012. Sadly, 'Focus on financial goals' saw a remarkable decline to 17%, which was supposed to be the second one in 2012 with 25%.
The diagrams compare information on the distribution of the residents of the USA for 6 various New Year resolutions over
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2 year
period of 2012 and 2014.
Overall
,
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each sector experienced a slight downfall in the following year. And, '
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Improve
personal fitness' led the race in each of these years.

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Improve
personal fitness
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was the most popular resolution in 2012 and 2014 with 32% and 29%
respectively
out of the total population. It
was observed
that number of
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people
for 'Quit
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bad
habits' that
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started
with 8% increased
drastically
by close to three times in 2014.
Hence
, making it the second most opted choice for the latter.
Similarly
, the 'Others' segment noticed the same trend of upward growth from 6% to 11%.
However
, the 'Travel' and 'Spend more time with family' had drop-in ratio by 6% and 2%
sequentially
, where 18% and 11%
were recorded
for 2012.
Sadly
, 'Focus on financial goals'
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saw
a remarkable decline to 17%, which
was supposed
to be the second one in 2012 with 25%.
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