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The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in the furniture industry.

The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in the furniture industry. JL6ye
The diagram shows production of steels rods, which is being done in the furniture industry. Overall, the entire process involves eleven stages, this begins with collection of raw materials and in the end steel is investigated, later can be used. At the beginning of the process, Iron core, yellow core, carbon are e collected, then all these materials kept into molting slit at 1300-1500 temperature, where it transformed into molten state. Following this, refinement takes places in the smelting cabin. Once the metal got refined, it put into pouring machine so that condescent metal can be poured into ingots. After this, ingots come in contact with the cooling reservoir, now metal moves via nozzles and strands of cool metal formed. In the next stage, cool strands of metal pass through rollers and then these rolls are placed into heating machine so that metal undergoes heat treatment. This is followed by checking of surface quality under automation. Later, special cutters are used to attain equal sizes and ends with stamping as well as inspection, after that, rods are ready to use. , met
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being done
in the furniture industry.

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, the entire process involves eleven stages, this
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begins
with collection of raw materials and in the
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end
steel
is investigated
, later can be
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used
.

At the beginning of the process, Iron core, yellow core, carbon are e collected, then all these materials
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kept
into molting slit at 1300-1500 temperature, where it transformed into molten state. Following this, refinement takes places in the smelting cabin. Once the
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metal
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refined, it put into pouring machine
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metal
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into ingots. After this, ingots
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in contact with the cooling reservoir,
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metal
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moves
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metal
formed.

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metal
pass through rollers and then these rolls
are placed
into heating machine
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that
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metal
undergoes heat treatment. This
is followed
by checking of surface quality under automation. Later, special cutters are
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used
to attain equal sizes and ends with stamping
as well
as inspection, after that, rods are ready to
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in the furniture industry.

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