Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they receive from employers.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they receive from employers. n6R77
The bar chart represents the major reasons to study among five different age groups and shows the support that they got from their employers. Overall, it can be seen that a greater number of students choose to study for their careers. Also, people under 26 received more support from their employers than the rest of the age groups. 80% of the individuals under the age of 26 studied for a career, whereas only 10% studied because of their interest. Similarly, the figure was 70% and nearly 60% for people who studied for a career, lying in the age group of 26-29 and 30-39 years. In addition, the percentage for 40-49 years was around 40% in both categories. People above 49 years mainly studied because of their interest, and the count for this age group 70%. With regards to employers' support, more than 60% of people under 26 received help from their employers. Furthermore, this figure was the highest among all categories. However, approximately 45% of the people above 49 got help from their employers.
The bar chart represents the major reasons to study among five
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the support that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
from their employers.

Overall
, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that a greater number of students choose to study for their careers.
Also
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
under 26 received more support from their employers than the rest of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups. 80%
of the individuals under the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
of 26
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studied
for a career, whereas
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
10%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studied
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their interest.
Similarly
, the figure was 70% and
nearly
60% for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studied
for a career, lying in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
of 26-29 and 30-39 years.
In addition
, the percentage for 40-49 years was around 40% in both categories.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
above 49 years
mainly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studied
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their interest, and the count for this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
70%.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
employers' support, more than 60% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
under 26 received
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from their employers.
Furthermore
, this figure was the highest among all categories.
However
, approximately 45% of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
above 49
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from their employers.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they receive from employers.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
174 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they receive from employers.