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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of participants who are young boys and girls who joined in six cultural and leisure activities in a survey. Overall, the boys were most interested in basketball and the girls were most favourite at dancing. It is obvious that reading made the least contribution to boys and listening to music was also the smallest segment for girls. Firstly, the proportion of children taking part in listening to music in both genders is the same percentage at 10%. Especially, no boys joined in netball, gymnastics, and dancing. Samely, there were not any girls participating in basketball, soccer, and skateboarding. Next, the number of girls taking part in reading was approximately twice as much as the boys one. Finally, The female participants in computer games were about twice as few as the male ones.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of participants who are young
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who
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in six cultural and leisure activities in a survey.

Overall
, the
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boys
were most interested in basketball and the
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were most
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at dancing. It is obvious that reading made the least contribution to
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boys
and listening to music was
also
the smallest segment for girls.

Firstly
, the proportion of children taking part in listening to music in both genders is the same percentage at 10%.
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, no
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boys
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joined
in netball, gymnastics, and dancing.
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Samely
, there were not any
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participating in basketball, soccer, and skateboarding.

Next
, the number of
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taking part in reading was approximately twice as much as the
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one.
Finally
, The female participants in computer games were about twice as few as the male ones.
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138 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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