Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task but does not fully develop the argument. Some points are underexplained, and the conclusion lacks a strong summary of the main arguments.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and lacks variety. There are instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word forms.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument but lacks logical flow in some areas. Ideas are not always well-connected, and transitions between points could be improved.
Grammatical Range
There are several grammatical errors, including issues with sentence structure and punctuation. The range of grammatical structures is limited.