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The diagram illustrates the eight stages of salmons' life cycle, which starts from egg and ends with adult fish. Overall, a salmon fish moves in three main locations which are: river, estuary and ocean. River is the most existing place where this types of fish stayed. At the beginning, on the river a salmon puts the eggs in the incubation stage, then it turns into a little fish which only the heard is appeared. After that, a small fish appears after few years and then it becomes a little big Finally, at the low area the fish goes into three steps the first one is migration to rearing areas, followed by growth and maturation and finally it moved to migration to spawning areas. As can be observed, the life cycle of a salmon moved from upper area to down area and it takes long time to turn from egg to adulthood. In the ocean a salmon tries to depends on its self of find its food and then it turns up and developed again.

The diagram illustrates the eight stages of salmons' life cycle, which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiates
starts
 from egg and ends with adult fish.

Overall
, a salmon fish This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocates
moves
 in three main locations which are: river, estuary and ocean. River is the most existing place where this types of fish stayed.

At the beginning, on the river a salmon puts the eggs in the incubation stage, then it turns into a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
 fish which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 the heard is appeared
.

After that, a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 fish appears after few years and then it becomes a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
Finally
, at the low You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 the fish goes into three steps the first
 one is migration to rearing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
areas
, followed by growth and maturation and finally
 it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 to migration to spawning areas.

As can be observed
, the life cycle of a salmon This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 from upper You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 to down You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 and it takes long time to turn from egg to adulthood. In the ocean a salmon tries to The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "depend".depend
depends
 on its self of find its food and then it turns up and developed again. 