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Some people think that all university students should study whatever course they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.1

Some people think that all university students should study whatever course they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 1
The confusion about the course to study in the tertiary institution still remains one puzzle yet to be unraveled. While some sets of people think that undergraduates should be allowed to study the course of their choice others think they should do subjects related to science and technology. In my opinion, I believe that learners should be allowed to take the path of knowledge they want in school. This essay will discuss both views and give a reasoned conclusion. On one hand, the best part of university learning is the ability to select one's course of study as this prevents the student from losing interest in school. When a 3rd level education student voluntarily selects a course of their choice not only will they be focused but they will also do the subject passionately. During a survey at the academic times of the Northwest University in 2017 it was reported that 10 students out of the 50 students offered admission for the history course dropped out because they were not interested in the course but had been forced to take the course as a result of their parent's influence. Therefore, in order to prevent this occurence it is necessary to encourage learners to practise what they love. On the other hand, studying useful courses in the university helps to develop the student's future career prospect. Doing lucrative courseworks will increase a learner's chanceof getting green collar jobs after graduation. For example, it has been reported that the highest earning field in Nigeria as at 2019 is the science and technical field for this reason it is essential that students do lucrative courses. Although, in my opinion, I believe allowing a learner study the course of their choice is highly important as this will prevent them from being inactive members of the school society. To sum up, although studying courses like science and technology is more beneficial to the student in the future, human's happiness supercedes this. It is highly recommended that the government provides a job awareness program for the students prior admission, in order, for them to familiarize with the different job opportunites attached to the various courses.
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some
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people
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that undergraduates should be
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to
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study
the
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course
of their choice others
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think
they should do subjects related to science and technology. In my opinion, I believe that learners should be
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allowed
to take the path of knowledge they want in school. This essay will discuss both views and give a reasoned conclusion.

On one hand, the best part of university learning is the ability to select one's
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course
of
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study
as this
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prevents
the
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student
from losing interest in school. When a 3rd level education
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student
voluntarily
selects a
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course
of their choice not
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only
will they
be focused
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but
they will
also
do the subject
passionately
. During a survey at the academic times of the Northwest University in 2017 it
was reported
that 10
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students
out of the 50
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students
offered admission for the history
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course
dropped out
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because
they were not interested in the
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course
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but
had
been forced
to take the
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course
as a result
of their parent's influence.
Therefore
, in order to
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prevent
this
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occurence
it is necessary to encourage learners to
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practise
what they
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love
.

On the other hand
, studying useful
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courses
in the university
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helps
to develop the student's future career prospect. Doing lucrative
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courseworks
will increase a learner's
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chanceof
getting green collar jobs after graduation.
For example
, it has
been reported
that the highest earning field in Nigeria as at 2019 is the science and technical field
for this reason
it is essential that
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students
do lucrative
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courses
. Although, in my opinion, I believe allowing a learner
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study
the
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course
of their choice is
highly
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important
as this will
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prevent
them from being inactive members of the school society.

To sum up, although studying
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courses
like science and technology is more beneficial to the
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student
in the future, human's happiness
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supercedes
this. It is
highly
recommended that the
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government
provides a job awareness program for the
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students
prior admission, in order, for them to familiarize with the
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different
job
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opportunites
attached to the various
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courses
.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever course they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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