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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting event bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and include your opinion, supported by examples. v.10

Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting event bring more problems than benefits. v. 10
There is a dispute over whether it would bring more benefits than damage to the country which hosted international sport related events. Some view it an opportunity to promote positive image for host country in front of the whole world, while others think extravagant events like that is a disaster rather than a good thing. I personally agree with the second opinion. For those people who oversee the positive sides of taking splendid events, they would argue that the temporary booming of local visits could bring significant economic benefits. Because obviously what comes with tourists is the coming of increasing amount of consumption, at least for a while, which directly helps local economy. Another potential contribution provided by the events is culture promotion, which also derived from international communications. For example, London 2012 Summer Olympics successfully made the double decker bus a famous symbol of London among worldwide. Nonetheless, the aftermath of every single fabulous events like Olympics Competition should definitely not be ignored, especially given the fact that substantial benefits are almost ephemeral. As a matter of fact, glamourous stadium which government throws millions of dollars on usually could not be put into proposal use again as big events does not happen all the year round. Furthermore, the maintenance fees is another huge waste of taxpayer’s money. Apart from economical problem, huge influx of visitors causes troubles for local traffic and environment, too. In fact, the 2014 FIFA World Cup in Brazil has been boycotted by local people in 2014 because of the issues discussed above. In my view, the temporary benefits brought by hosting splendid international sports events are limited in many perspectives, while the negative influences for local people are real and considerably undeniable. Therefore, it may not be a wise decision to sacrifice the warfare of citizens in exchange for government political gains.
There is a dispute over whether it would bring more
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benefits
than damage to the country which hosted international sport related
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events
.
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Some
view it an opportunity to promote
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positive
image for host country in front of the whole world, while others
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think
extravagant
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events
like
that is
a disaster
rather
than a
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good
thing. I
personally
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agree
with the second opinion.

For those
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people
who oversee the
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positive
sides of taking splendid
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events
, they would argue that the temporary booming of
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local
visits could bring significant economic
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benefits
.
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Because
obviously
what
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comes
with tourists is the coming of increasing amount of consumption, at least for a while, which
directly
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helps
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local
economy. Another potential contribution provided by the
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events
is culture promotion, which
also
derived from international communications.
For example
, London 2012 Summer Olympics
successfully
made the
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double decker
bus a
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famous
symbol of London among worldwide.

Nonetheless, the aftermath of every single fabulous
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events
like Olympics Competition should definitely not be
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ignored
,
especially
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given
the fact that substantial
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benefits
are almost ephemeral. As a matter of fact,
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glamourous
stadium which
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government
throws millions of dollars on
usually
could not
be put
into proposal
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use
again as
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big
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events
does not happen all the year round.
Furthermore
, the maintenance fees is another huge waste of taxpayer’s money. Apart from economical problem, huge influx of visitors causes troubles for
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local
traffic and environment, too. In fact, the 2014 FIFA World Cup in Brazil has
been boycotted
by
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local
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people
in 2014
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because
of the issues discussed above.

In my view, the temporary
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benefits
brought by hosting splendid international sports
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events
are limited
in
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many
perspectives, while the
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negative
influences for
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local
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people
are real and
considerably
undeniable.
Therefore
, it may not be a wise decision to sacrifice the warfare of citizens in exchange for
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government
political gains.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting event bring more problems than benefits. v. 10

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307 words
6.5
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