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Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. m0kO
In recent years, creative artists have become a broad issue to the general public. Some people believe that governments should give financial support to creative artists. However, others think that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. In my opinion, I agree with the former idea. Discussed below are several reasons supporting my perspective. First and foremost, people should recognize that some art projects are funded by the state. A very important point to consider is that artworks appearing on the road play a big role in foreigners’ view of the culture of a country. This means that they serve to educate people about the city, and act as landmark or talking points for visitors and tourists. Thus the government should pay creative artists to produce this kind of art, because without their funding our cities would be much less interesting and attractive. To illustrate this point, I would like to mention that in Yen Dung district, there are many historical paintings painted by artists here and paid for by the government. On the other hand, there are several arguments in support of the idea that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. It is convincing to realize that when the state invests in artists, the amount invested in society is less. Thus artists should compose and sell their works instead of financially supporting the state. Or they should apply for capital from art companies. A specific example of this is that famous artists are very wealthy by selling their arts. in conclusion, the above mentioned facts have created a dilemma when people evaluate the impact of this issue, and it is still a controversial issue. As far as I am concerned, I put more highlight on the idea that governments should give financial support to creative artists. People should have further consideration on this issue.
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people
should recognize that
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projects
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by the state. A
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important
point to consider is that artworks appearing on the road play a
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role in foreigners’ view of the culture of a country. This means that they serve to educate
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people
about the city, and act as landmark or talking points for visitors and tourists.
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Thus
the
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government
should pay
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creative
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artists
to produce this kind of
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,
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because
without their funding our cities would be much less interesting and attractive. To illustrate this point, I would like to mention that in Yen Dung district, there are
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many
historical paintings painted by
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artists
here and paid for by the
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government
.

On the other hand
, there are several arguments in support of the
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idea
that
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creative
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artists
should
be funded
by alternative sources. It is convincing to realize that when the state invests in
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artists
, the amount invested in society is less.
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Thus
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artists
should compose and sell their works
instead
of
financially
supporting the state. Or they should apply for capital from
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art
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companies
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are
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arts
.
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in
conclusion, the above mentioned facts have created a dilemma when
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people
evaluate the impact of this
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issue
, and it is
still
a controversial
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issue
. As far as I
am concerned
, I put more highlight on the
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idea
that
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governments
should give financial support to
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creative
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artists
.
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People
should have
further
consideration on this
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issue
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources.

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