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Many people believe cities should not try to preserve its old, historic buildings and instead, they should destroy them and replace them with modern buildings. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Many people believe cities should not try to preserve its old, historic buildings and instead, they should destroy them and replace them with modern buildings. v. 1
There is currently a contentious argument advocating that metropolitan authorities should demolish old city structures instead of preserving them in order to make way for new ones. I strongly disagree with this notion because they are a window into the past and an asset to national tourism. The main reason why I strongly advocate against the destruction of the old buildings is because they are a window into the past. Every building is a form of living history and can tell us something about the city’s past. By studying older buildings, researchers can glean an understanding about the evolution of construction methods as well as the development of the prevailing culture. Notwithstanding this, the historical buildings stand in testimony to those who have gone before us and took the time to build something meaningful and the architecture is a form of art that once destroyed will be gone forever. Another reason why I don’t support the demolition of older buildings is that they are a valuable asset to the tourism industry. Many modern cities have an abundant and rich past. The older buildings are tangible evidence of that past. A lot of tourists will go out of their way to visit a city just to see and touch that history. Without the historical buildings, many cities would lose their identity. For instance, I can go to a nightclub or shopping center in near any city in the world but it is only in New York that I can see the Empire State Building. In conclusion, I am completely against the destruction of old buildings as it would deprive us of insights into our history and it would also cause us to lose valuable tourism revenue. Instead of looking to destroy what others have built, I think governments should immediately take steps to protect our heritage.
There is
currently
a contentious argument advocating that metropolitan authorities should demolish
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old
city structures
instead
of preserving them in order to
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make
way for new ones. I
strongly
disagree with this notion
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because
they are a window into the
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past
and an asset to national tourism.

The main reason why I
strongly
advocate against the destruction of the
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old
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buildings
is
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because
they are a window into the
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past
. Every
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building
is a form of living history and can
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tell
us something about the city’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
. By studying older
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buildings
, researchers can glean an understanding about the evolution of construction methods
as well
as the development of the prevailing culture. Notwithstanding this, the historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
stand in testimony to those who have gone
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before
us and took the time to build something meaningful and the architecture is a form of art that once
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destroyed
will
be gone
forever.

Another reason why I don’t support the demolition of older
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buildings
is that they are a valuable asset to the tourism industry.
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Many
modern
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cities
have an abundant and rich
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past
. The older
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buildings
are tangible evidence of that
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past
.
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A lot of
tourists will go out of their way to visit a city
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just
to
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see
and touch that history. Without the historical
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buildings
,
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many
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cities
would lose their identity.
For instance
, I can go to a nightclub or shopping center in near any city in the world
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but
it is
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only
in New York that I can
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see
the Empire State Building.

In conclusion
, I am completely against the destruction of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
as it would deprive us of insights into our history and it would
also
cause us to lose valuable tourism revenue.
Instead
of looking to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroy
what others have built, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
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governments
should immediately take steps to protect our heritage.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe cities should not try to preserve its old, historic buildings and instead, they should destroy them and replace them with modern buildings. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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