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Define a ballad, and then explain why "Barbara Allen" can be classified as a ballad. v.1

Define a ballad, and then explain why "Barbara Allen" can be classified as a ballad. v. 1
A large number of people spend most of their time at work. Our life is divided into three equal parts: 8 hours - sleep, 8 hours - task, 8 hours - family time. So, in the most cases, one co-worker plays an important role in one's life. From my opinion, the essential characteristics of a comrade are the following. First of all, a person who works closely with me must like his stint. I think it is very important for a somebody to feel satisfaction with his job. My husband is a software developer. He is fond of his career and people enjoy working with him because they see how much energy he puts into his business. Second of all, my companion must be persistent and never give up. I like when people who came across a problem, try to solve it, find a good decision instead of looking for another person to hand it over. Another important aspect of this is that a good worker should always ask himself "What can be improved? " And suggests new solutions. In addition, he must be a good party player. In the modern world good communication skills and the ability to work in a team are among the common position requirements. Personally, I think it is great to help each other, share new ideas, develop new solutions, etc. It helps to create a company spirit and improve a labour productivity. Finally, my acquaintance must be punctual. He or she should finish the job on time I think that It is unacceptable to make the rest of a squad wait while a person finishes his or her job. Also, my "ideal body" should always be ready to offer his or her help and be supportive. To summarize, I think if a spouse possesses all of these qualities mentioned above he can make work with him really enjoyable and productive
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spend most of their time at
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. Our life
is divided
into three equal parts: 8 hours
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sleep, 8 hours
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task, 8 hours
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family time.
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role in one's life. From my opinion, the essential characteristics of a comrade are the following.

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First of all
, a person who works
closely
with me
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must
like his stint. I
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think
it is
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very
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important
for a somebody to feel satisfaction with his job. My husband is a software developer. He is fond of his career and
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people
enjoy working with him
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because
they
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see
how much energy he puts into his business.

Second of all, my companion
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must
be persistent and never give up. I like when
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people
who came across a problem, try to solve it, find a
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good
decision
instead
of looking for another person to hand it over. Another
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important
aspect of this is that a
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good
worker should always ask himself
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What can be
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improved
?
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"
And suggests new solutions.

In addition
, he
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must
be a
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good
party player. In the modern world
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good
communication
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skills
and the ability to
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work
in a team are among the common position requirements.
Personally
, I
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think
it is great to
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help
each other, share new
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ideas
, develop new solutions, etc. It
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helps
to create a
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company
spirit and
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improve
a
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productivity.

Finally
, my acquaintance
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must
be punctual. He or she should finish the job on time I
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think
that It is unacceptable to
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make
the rest of a squad wait while a person finishes
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his or her
job.
Also
, my
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"
ideal body
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should always be ready to offer
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his or her
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help
and be supportive.

To summarize
, I
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think
if a spouse possesses all of these qualities mentioned above he can
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work
with him
really
enjoyable and productive
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IELTS essay Define a ballad, and then explain why "Barbara Allen" can be classified as a ballad. v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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